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BubbleBlock
368 posts |
#186164 2008-05-20 20:28 GMT |
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"Sleep with me"
Sleep With me Hold me tight Don’t let me go ‘Til the morning light Cradle me in your care Your whispers sweet in my ear Tender lips brush gently, I sigh... I feel your body pressed against my thigh Time stands still for us just once...Sleep with me... Temari |
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DoubleParked
393 posts |
#186165 2008-05-20 20:33 GMT |
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This is very well done, my compliments.
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Rob
370 posts |
#186166 2008-05-20 20:33 GMT |
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the mood is very relaxing i think people would like this alot
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FallingMoon
405 posts |
#186167 2008-05-20 20:36 GMT |
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HAHA i LOVE iT!!!
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liquidmetal
349 posts |
#186168 2008-05-20 20:45 GMT |
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Very good. Keep up the good work.
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Salinger
400 posts |
#186169 2008-05-20 21:07 GMT |
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Amazing work. I like the way the poem's lines grow in length to create a pleasing visual effect that works well in conjunction with the calming mood that is set by the actual words.
Great job! 
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Green
345 posts |
#186170 2008-05-20 21:08 GMT |
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Awwww this is so sweet. I love it!!
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Windows
369 posts |
#186171 2008-05-20 21:10 GMT |
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Who could refuse such a wonderful, and wonderfully written invitation? I gotta tell ya though.... I snore.
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SomeOne
358 posts |
#186172 2008-05-21 03:31 GMT |
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Um, er, Shay yoo hoo! I don't mean to be rude but there won't be room in the bed if we ALL accept!
(Just a simple observation now) It even works upside down you know! (I won't delete this comment but I can see where some people would) Seriously this is beautiful! :-) |
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FollowTheLeader
374 posts |
#186173 2008-05-21 10:59 GMT |
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Alone.......as I lie awake......in my bed
Longing for the warmth of your body Remembering how your skin feels Desperately needing your touch Awaiting........your soft lips Filled with such passion Pressed against mine In my arms Now I Dream |
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NaughtyNinja
355 posts |
#186174 2008-05-21 12:13 GMT |
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Sleep
with me like it was our very last night. Kiss my eyelids, soft lips, like it was your last time to feel the silk of my skin and my sleepy, heavy eyelids gently brush you. In the morning be grateful that I'm still here, Naked and fast asleep, dot in your questions, and clear. I liked your poem, but unfortunately it was written to a man from a woman. It's so unnatural.  Sorry Shaun : P |
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Bullfrog
381 posts |
#186175 2008-05-21 12:47 GMT |
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I am
in Love with you Temari. Yes, I will sleep with you. |
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